My newest adventure is underway. It has lead me to take up residency in a new blog,
Like the Feathers of an Arrow (affectionately known as LFA).

...don't open...don't throw away... is not disappearing completely (not yet),
but postings here will be limited.

Monday, March 14, 2011

10 Full Bloom

Before the proof can disappear,
come see this precious flower bloom.
The world must know what I hold dear
for soon the proof shall disappear.
I must present my findings here.
He gave this bud to dull my gloom;
a vow, his love won't disappear.
Come see!  My heart is in full bloom.

all it took was a little down time, i suppose.  for here it is, as complete as it was meant to be.  my original thoughts for a triolet (One Stop Poetry's Form Monday prompt) manage to finally bloom.  i toyed a bit with the repeating lines (a bit more than my earlier attempt); i almost changed disappear in the second to last line to near, but after a bit more tinkering, i found a way to maintain that original word.  i also would have preferred to use "wouldn't" in the second to last line, but i couldn't wrap my head around it only being counted as one syllable, so i went with "won't" instead.

Since I already posted up a triolet earlier for OSP Form Monday, this will make it way to OSP's One Shot Wednesday


  1. this is absolutely lovely! i don't have the courage to attempt a triolet. really enjoyed yours.

  2. oh, a beautiful triolet and a heart-warming message as well. a bloom just for you, he does love us so :)

  3. lovely triolet...almost as much as a heart in bloom...

  4. Wonderful triolet. I think they are charming and it is good to step back from free verse now and again. And I liked how you changed it just slightly in the end to full bloom! Fun.

  5. Love what you did here with the triolet...lovely and a vow to bring love into full bloom...bkm

  6. Ah!! A heart in full bloom is most powerful flower in the world. Liked it so much. thanks for sharing.

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  7. Lovely Triolet....May all of our hearts bloom!

    ♥ ஆεlεɳa ~.^

  8. Beautiful Triolet and equally beautiful words :)
    Very well attempted!

    Oh so romantic.. sigh

    Love xox

  9. Aahh... how sweet and romantic... may this flower stay as beautiful as ever!! And may it never disappear...