off stage--waiting for his cue
it never comes
the lines are all wrong--no laughter echoes
in the aisles
the costumes are strange--bright brilliant colors lacking
on the racks--and his cue
it never comes
the backdrop doesn't fit--seascapes should coat
the curtains
the scenery changes--night in and night out
on stage--and his cue
in never comes
he hovers patiently--whispering his lines
in his head--waiting for his cue
tonight's the night
deep in his bones he can tell--though
the faces are different
the costumes seem a tad unfamiliar
the backdrop feels a bit off
but the lines
they definitely are a perfect fit
tonight's the night
he hovers patiently--his sword at the ready
off stage--waiting for his cue
tonight's the night
he takes two steps--his sword at the ready
impatience finally having set in--his feet fall out
beneath him--crashing into memories
pools of red--curtains fall like blood dripping
from him--he whispers his lines
into the air--they fade like his last breath
waiting for his cue
it never comes
he hovers patiently--sword at the ready
off stage--waiting for his cue
"The Show Must Go On" (Photo by Jacob Lucas) |
That endless sense of waiting to take the stage, armed and ready, for a moment that just won't come. Sounds an awful lot like life and death to me. Excellent set up and various refrains.
ReplyDeleteGood piece, good use of repetition. Solid work.
ReplyDeleteOh my what a take and all that waiting and finally and he trips ...gives to meaning to why we should live in the moment....bkm
ReplyDeleteugh...the waiting, prepping build up only to be never called...i hear the desire and maybe despair...
ReplyDelete"And here on this stage, ladies and gents, we have the theater ghost. Oh you can see him, can't you just there at the edge. Try not to stare directly at him; he is prepared, he awaits his cue..and waiting still, it's never come. Moving on.." I couldn't resist. It felt a play within a play and the words were everything. Well done. Gay
ReplyDeletereally dig your take on the prompt...really get a sense of the wait...the dark discomfort it stirs within..repetition is superb here
ReplyDeletewonderful piece
i love repetition and you've used it very effectively. when he finally gets impatient, he trips. funny if not so tragic. a great One Shoot.
ReplyDeleteOh, what a nice depiction of what I call "spin". Not sure if you meant it in this way, but I noticed that internal chatter that awaits...and says if only...always planning and awaiting that perfect moment.
ReplyDeleteTalk about "drama, drama, drama"! Such a sensitive look at this photo. Well done.
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