she wields her words with subtle grace
a sword that strikes straight through the heart
she speaks a truth you fear to face
she wields her words with subtle grace
her ink stains you cannot erase
with love and rage your torn apart
she wields her words with subtle grace
a sword that strikes straight through the heart
today, inspired by One Stop Poetry's Form Monday, i once again attempted a triolet. it took awhile for me to find the right thought, especially when i'm not particularly fond of having to count syllables (which i'm sure i have mentioned multiple times in the past)...and then of course there's making sure the stress lands appropriately with multi-syllable words and on non-insignificant words (like 'sword' instead of 'that')... non-insignificant is a double negative...i suppose significant would have suffices...
those are some piercing words...and you can feel them with the references to sword and striking through the heart...well done...bkm
ReplyDeleteBravo! This is a perfect example of a triolet in iambic tetrameter! It does take a while but you've got the rhythm and the concept down to a tee here! Excellent!
ReplyDeleteThis is fabulous. It isn't easy but it makes one think and struggle for expression. I like that and tried my second one today.
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