STRESS
Pressure
overwhelmed
a vice grip takes hold
squeezing every juicy drop
leaving a hollow figure
"state of heart altering strain"
Pressure
overwhelmed
a vice grip takes hold
squeezing every juicy drop
leaving a hollow figure
"state of heart altering strain"
decided to go with a clarity pyramid for this one...seems like i've used this form at least once per month in the past two months so i might as well continue the pattern and include at least one this month...
so i finished the whole thing just to find out i missed the word 'figure'; the seven syllable line originally read, "leaving you an empty shell." i really didn't want to loose the word 'you' in the line, but... anyway, this poem was inspired by Three Word Wednesday [3WW=>figure, juicy, stress].
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ReplyDeleteSheilagh Lee said: nicely written.Ilove how it comes together
Perfect description--been there a time or two myself. I've found that a nice Merlot or cold Sam Adams can often refill the "hollow figure." But that's just me!
ReplyDeleteYou really portrayed the feeling of 'hollowness' ('squeezing every juicy drop')..the words were powerful no matter what the poetic form..Jae
ReplyDeletethank you for the intro to the poem form, very interesting... you have so nailed a killer...
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