My newest adventure is underway. It has lead me to take up residency in a new blog,
Like the Feathers of an Arrow (affectionately known as LFA).

...don't open...don't throw away... is not disappearing completely (not yet),
but postings here will be limited.

Wednesday, December 8, 2010

2 Creatures of the Night

Streets
at nightfall
bring forth the crazies,
prowling for tasty morsels;
souls,
judged worthy of their sweet kiss,
run fruitlessly; hope
for safety
dashed



attempt #2 at a Butterfly Oddquain.  additional inspirations for this post came from Three Word Wednesday [3WW=>judge, nightfall, safety], as well as Poetic Asides' Wednesday Poetry Prompt.  part of me thought to entitle it vampires, but i felt 'creatures of the night' worked a bit more.  i'm not really good at the whole punctuation thing.  probably should have just left it without, but i am rather fond of commas.  as for the semicolons, well their half comma so...

2 comments:

  1. Nice wings! And welcome to poetic asides, too!
    As far as punctuation, I read somewhere that if it's not clunky or obvious, then it's just fine. And I agree. I used to spend too much time on it. And since nothing flew out at me on first read of your oddquain, i'd say you've done a fine job!

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  2. Commas are the only punctuation I use. The odd time I use a semi colon but I think as a poet there are no rules. As for the piece, I thought it was quite well written, I enjoyed it thoroughly. Love and Light, Sender

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