on uneasy feet he stands.
hollow eyes accentuate
his drawn face
as his world crumbles
he longs to lay down beside her
(his love
his sweet
his own
Annabel Lee)
okay so I'm not really sure how I got from the Three Word Wednesday prompt [3WW=>crumble(s), drawn, uneasy] to this. By the time I got to the end (before the parentheses), I was thinking about Edgar Allen Poe's poem Annabel Lee. I'm not sure what it is about this poem, but I've always been kind of partial to it. Than again, I just generally enjoy Poe's twisted works.
Truth is I'm not sure I should add the part in parentheses, thus the ( ). I don't know....
I pictured him losing his love to death's call and like Orpheus wanted to follow her...I loved it.
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderful!! I am too enjoy some Poe now and then and especially Annabel Lee--we named our lab after that poem. One of the greats and this was really enjoyable. Thank you for visiting me at Cracker Jack Poet too. :-)
ReplyDeleteI also pictured him losing his love to death...and the parenthetical stanza works for me. Parentheses included.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your visit! :)
You've packed a lot of pain and sorrow in these few lines--I enjoyed it very much!
ReplyDeleteYou could feel the pain wreching in each line.
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