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but postings here will be limited.

Wednesday, July 25, 2012

9 HURT

HURT
injure
mutilate

New Endangered List
prompts razor blade hazard--
warning targets teenagers.

"release of mental pain through cuts."



It seems like forever since I last (a) tried my hand at a clarity pyramid and (b) found myself pondering the words over at Three Word Wednesday.  But it seems only natural that on this last Wednesday of the month (now that I've found my way back to writing), I should explore both of these.


The first thing that came to mind when I saw this weeks words [3WW=>cut(s), endanger(ed), hazard] was cutting.  It took me a little while to get it to come together; and still, I'm not really sure the middle stanza necessarily depicts a "life event" as it is meant to, but I think it works anyway.


9 comments:

  1. thinking about 'cutters' is so very sad....I just can't imagine it....too horrifying...

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  2. Sad and powerful..nice use of the words.

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  3. That is one disease I just don't get, but you enlightened me!

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  4. Slicing away the syllables is an effective metaphor for a strange aberration - nailing what it does and the relief it gives is a sobering ending. These things do need attention and what better than this concise poem.

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  5. I don't know squat about pyramids in poetic structure, but the last line is a total zinger. Excellent.

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  6. Good to try out various forms. Appears a tempting challenge!

    Hank

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  7. beautiful explained. Cutting is a disease I don't understand but it's very sad that someone would feel the need to harm themselves.

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  8. The ideas build up..brick by brick..nicely done..jae

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  9. you def picked a tough topic and one that is prevalent as well...this is a tight little piece...do not know this form...

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