my original goal was to get this up yesterday, but i had issues at home with the audio program i use...but quite honestly i'll be happy if i don't end up as the closing act at OpenLinkNight for the third week in a row. (i wonder what it must feel like to be first...or in the top ten for that matter.)
anyway...yesterday, in my attempt to make it through the dVerse~Poets Pub doors on Tuesday instead of Wednesday, i found myself revisiting six lines that had been sitting patiently waiting to burst (into song). i'm not really sure if the lines that ended up coming to life fit the sound of the first six nor if it (in its entirety) fully says what--in the back of my mind--i wished. still i have decided to throw it out there...let it sink in a bit...and if need be alter later should the need arise.
on a side note: while i am slowly becoming more accepting of my recorded spoken voice, i'm still not particularly fond (and that's putting it lightly) of my recorded singing voice...so do beware...
These Walls
I been lost for long long time
caught between myself and the daily grind
I been waiting on something to take me away
instead of looking in mirror at my own face
now the time has come for me to take control
and finally feel a love I've never known
I'm gonna break these walls I built around me
sing my praise 'til I believe in me
I'm gonna dance beneath the moonlight naked
tear at this disguise so I can see the real me
I can feel her deep inside of me
this woman fighting to break free
I can hear her pleas and rattling chains
all I need do is call her name
the time has come for me to let go
release myself from all I have known
I'm gonna break these walls I built around me
sing my praise 'til I believe in me
I'm gonna dance beneath the moonlight naked
tear at this disguise so I can see the real me
nice...i think you have a great bluesy voice...and it fits this verse very well...
ReplyDeleteThis touches on an almost universal feeling, I think. That someone deep inside us longing to break free. Something made me want this put to music. And musicians are always looking for good lyrics!
ReplyDeleteI want you to break out of there too! In fact, I think you just did! Beautiful poem, even more beautiful voice......
ReplyDeleteit sounds like an awesome plan to me.
ReplyDeleteloved the energy in your words.
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it sounds like an awesome plan to me.
ReplyDeleteloved the energy in your words.
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Absolutely beautiful!!
ReplyDeletei also really enjoyed your voice with this piece-- the poem reads as song, and i think you've expressed it perfectly.
ReplyDeletelovely verse and I enjoyed the interpretation given in the audio, the refrain is perfectly stated to the need to break free from our own mind made binds. Wonderful write ~ Rose
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