seamless flight falters;
as turbulent winds take hold,
wings dive seeking shelter's peace
brewing emotions
seek refuge in the storm's touch
spirits soar--embracing rain
there is not much on the sedoka--not really. the form is ancient--older than the haiku. it dates back to the same time as the choka and the tanka. when I first discovered the form on Shadow Poetry, the form was mentioned to be two katauta that could stand as single poems. it also mentioned that the form "may address the same subject from different perspectives." it is this idea that has intrigued me from the beginning. recently I have begun to see if I could find more information on the form. still there is very little, but a lot of the sites that I know found state the two katauta should be adjacent--not separated as I original found them to be. I'm not sure what the right way is, but I'll keep continue to keep the separate for now.
this sedoka is the second one I've written inspired by Three Word Wednesday.
[3WW=>emotion(s), falter(s), touch]
well written
ReplyDeleteyour sedoka, whether alone or together, were (was?) superb....I particularly liked the first - the imagery was lovely...
ReplyDeleteBeautiful.
ReplyDeletenice...i like these...and how they play together...really intrigued by the form as well...that is new on me...
ReplyDeletei am going to try this form.Quite a good effort.
ReplyDeleteThis form is also new to me. I'm afraid it demands more discipline than I'm capable of. I love your effort.
ReplyDeleteThe sound and pace of this piece really shone through..jae
ReplyDeleteLovely words, especially at the end. We cannot embrace life if we cannot embrace the rain.
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