Artist: Little Big Town
Album: The Road to Here
Genre: Country
Notes: I decided with this installment to switch genres once again. As I mentioned in my first CIHTD? while I have a somewhat eclectic taste in music, country probably outweighs the others. I have always enjoyed this group--just thinking about their songs has my head bopping up and down; their always fun!
An Aside: This week at dVerse Poets Pub (a wonderful place for poets from around the world to create, learn, grow and share poetry) they have been celebrating their one year anniversary. Yesterday's event involved selecting a poem submitted over the course of the year to any of their prompts. While perusing the different submissions, I came across a poem (and prompt) that I had missed while on my hiatus. And in doing so was introduced to a new form: Framed Couplets. So, crazy me--seeing as how I am not crazy about writing with rhymes--decided to give it a go. I mention all this so you will forgive the monstrosity below.
You Made Your Bed
Should you listen close you'll hear the bones;
wooden doors can hardly squelch their moans.
Spawns of deeds you've done that now decay--
haunting you no matter where you lay.
Don't believe the closet door will keep
groaning ghosts away, for they shall creep.
Running scarred will not keep them at bay;
nonetheless you'll try to breakaway.
But there is no place for you to hide,
'cause they're yours--within you they reside.
I think this is a noble attempt. It's as good or better than most I've read and I think you have the hang of it. The process is a little painful, I'd admit, but there is glory in working through rhyme and meter. I think in using it as lyrics it's very satisfying. My friend, Hector, who invented the form loved the discipline of meter/rhyme but didn't want the "sound" of it, so when the lines enjamb it will rhyme but it doesn't "stop" on the rhyme. Bravo for doing it! I believe the more we learn about tools and devices, the better poets we are, not just in our own writing but in appreciating poetry in general.
ReplyDeletenice...i really like the first line, it is a gripper...def agree as well with gays assessment...actually cant remember if i tried this one...will have to go back and see...form sometimes scares me...smiles.
ReplyDeleteThat is certainly no monstrosity! It is a very fin framed couplet (and believe me I know that they are not easy to compose!)
ReplyDeleteMany thanks for visiting my blog.
"...a very fine framed couplet" is, obviously, what I meant to write!
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