My newest adventure is underway. It has lead me to take up residency in a new blog,
Like the Feathers of an Arrow (affectionately known as LFA).

...don't open...don't throw away... is not disappearing completely (not yet),
but postings here will be limited.

Wednesday, August 3, 2011

6 Treading Tears

Treading Tears

This salty ocean threatens to consume
where ripples of emotions build to crests
untamed and wild at times, then soft and mild.
I find myself forever treading waves
forever lost within this tempest's snare.
I long for your embrace to hold me safe
to soothe the raging waters deep within
to quiet suffocating thoughts and fears.

I long for you as always, but today
as into burning flames I stare with tears,
Poseidon's stormy wrath is fierce and strong.
The lights do flicker with another year
of celebration passing by once more.
Where previously both our names did ring,
I stand alone my lips remaining still.

Your hug is all I wish for with this breath
a hopeless wish, but still I cling to it,
my life vest filled with fading memories.
This salty ocean threatens to consume
as I do try to tread these silent tears.

my intent was blank verse (partially because i wasn't in the mood for rhyming, but) mainly i figured having to conform to a structure would help me from living the title of this poem. i'm filling a little iffy on the blank verse (particularly with 'life vest'), but i've decided not to over-'stress' myself this time with trying for perfection. the form served its purpose for me well enough.

inspiration for this piece came in part from dVerse~Poets Pub Poetics--The Watering Hole (hosted by Sheila Moore), which i unfortunately missed. and in part by this evening's impending song, which i had thought to end this poem with (a tricky one to write in iambic pentameter--had to break words over multiple lines), but its inclusion would defeat the purpose of choosing to use a form for this poem.

this is my contribution for tonight's OpenLinkNight over at dVerse~Poets Pub where a vast offering of talent writers come to share their love of poetry.


  1. Your blank verse I think is very successful as such, though I am not the best person to scan a meter perfectly, especially iambic pentameter, which does not flow very naturally for me. But I notice I read two entire stanzas thinking it was rhymed then realizing it was just very well metered, to give a strong feeling of structure. I liked the opening lines especially, though I think you may mean where? Enjoyed it and glad you linked in.

  2. emotive write...i feel the longing...just for a hug...yeah i like the beat within this...treading tears is quite the image as well..

  3. This is beautiful, and I enjoyed listening to you read it. It made my eyes watery :)

  4. I can relate to treading water! I hope you get that hug, and hopefully on nice dry land where all is well.

  5. this is so sad and heart tugging...

    i like these lines:
    "The lights do flicker with another year
    of celebration passing by once more.
    Where previously both our names did ring,
    I stand alone my lips remaining still."

    thanks for sharing and linking ~

  6. This is beautifully composed, treading tears evokes such a broad amount of emotions. I was touched by the read ~ Rose