tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3681047059820449960.post7220085396521270512..comments2024-03-02T11:41:20.786-05:00Comments on ... don't open ... don't throw away ...: CIHTD?: It Brings Me To My KneesRMPhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04054771419356465116noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3681047059820449960.post-24589158600721420362013-01-20T00:43:09.187-05:002013-01-20T00:43:09.187-05:00beautiful and inspiring words. so many things hav...beautiful and inspiring words. so many things have and still do bring me to my knees in prayer. you did a fine job with the form too.Sheilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06541409754494611831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3681047059820449960.post-64484587310342098812013-01-19T14:45:18.706-05:002013-01-19T14:45:18.706-05:00I am very impressed with your weaved form as I onl...I am very impressed with your weaved form as I only managed with two stanzas ~ Scribble outside the lines resonated with me ~ Great work ~ Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02213172239590722747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3681047059820449960.post-15033790048312197752013-01-19T13:07:17.829-05:002013-01-19T13:07:17.829-05:00For me this is a very relatable piece. I like the...For me this is a very relatable piece. I like the weave and I think your inspiration is right again--glad you didn't question, the references fit perfectly.Jennifer Wagnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344877737695801883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3681047059820449960.post-9949006342179920052013-01-19T08:19:12.133-05:002013-01-19T08:19:12.133-05:00I'm sitting on the sidelines
of my own life wa...I'm sitting on the sidelines<br />of my own life watching it pass me by.<br /><br /><br />... powerful, sad... but the sun will peak, and prayer does help.Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3681047059820449960.post-79713027711133630782013-01-19T06:56:36.525-05:002013-01-19T06:56:36.525-05:00some tight images..sitting on the sidelines of lif...some tight images..sitting on the sidelines of life watching it pass by is the one that struck me most..love the hop and courage in the closure and well done on the form as wellClaudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3681047059820449960.post-48679519732512386352013-01-18T21:35:01.568-05:002013-01-18T21:35:01.568-05:00i go driving in the desert with the bunnies and th...i go driving in the desert with the bunnies and the tires getting stuck and going in circles. i know just how this feels both metaphorically and on the nose<br /><br /><a href="javascript:void(0);" rel="nofollow">quantum kisses</a>Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3681047059820449960.post-84819893264968480652013-01-18T19:21:21.069-05:002013-01-18T19:21:21.069-05:00nice...i think you did really well with it...i als...nice...i think you did really well with it...i also like the alternating longs line stanzas and then the short line...makes it like a song...def felt the emotions in it as well...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3681047059820449960.post-63031636332148677842013-01-18T18:58:40.065-05:002013-01-18T18:58:40.065-05:00You've used the weave form well - and then ada...You've used the weave form well - and then adapted it to your needs with your closing stanza. So much of what you have written in this poem speaks of the feeling of despair and depression, as experienced from the inside. I hope all is well with you.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3681047059820449960.post-19336766411627422882013-01-18T17:39:44.918-05:002013-01-18T17:39:44.918-05:00I love that you posted it the way you did. The &qu...I love that you posted it the way you did. The "Weave" works well and I am thinking really "does" what David means it to do. It reads as free verse but it has that bit of repetition and rhyme that harkens a distant song. This rocks & rolls for me. I believe either of your choices on the last couplet work!Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.com