tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3681047059820449960.post3671652695641217481..comments2024-03-02T11:41:20.786-05:00Comments on ... don't open ... don't throw away ...: Breathing You InRMPhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04054771419356465116noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3681047059820449960.post-2798014158742366402011-08-28T15:40:50.484-04:002011-08-28T15:40:50.484-04:00the demon sestina! bravothe demon sestina! bravoLuke Praterhttp://lukepraterswordsalad.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3681047059820449960.post-6057306970671897622011-08-27T14:57:27.337-04:002011-08-27T14:57:27.337-04:00This is a fine stestina. Good imagery and message....This is a fine stestina. Good imagery and message.<br />Sestinas are a tricky task. There were just a couple times when I thought a filler word was thrown in to meet the meter, but I do that too. Excellent overall.<br /><br />Great job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3681047059820449960.post-19375647414018333532011-08-27T12:54:59.064-04:002011-08-27T12:54:59.064-04:00So this is how it is done. Great job. Anxiety cr...So this is how it is done. Great job. Anxiety crashing is an interesting concept and image. Superb. Luv the way you handled this difficult form and presented something that read so well.Henry Clemmonshttp://henryclemmons.wordpress.com/2011/08/27/poets-reach/#commentsnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3681047059820449960.post-85985756053230306092011-08-26T21:46:42.342-04:002011-08-26T21:46:42.342-04:00You are my air with every breath I take.
It seems ...You are my air with every breath I take.<br />It seems against all odds you fought for me--<br />with love -- intent on bringing us to life<br /><br />A moving trip through the forming of attachment and the difficulties of love. Thank you for sharing it with us.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3681047059820449960.post-30145936429891981892011-08-26T21:42:20.301-04:002011-08-26T21:42:20.301-04:00I'm certainly glad you took the challenge. I&#...I'm certainly glad you took the challenge. I'm sorry you may be missed by some because this sestina is a beautiful, heartfelt love song. And to add to it your playing it with iambic pent made the voice stronger IMO. If "air" proved difficult to access, it certainly doesn't show in the finished product. The whole poem has a softness to it that is never syrupy or cloying. Beautiful.<br />Thank you, GayBeachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.com